Kudos and congrats, you made it look easy (when I'm sure it isn't.)
I like this movie because I relate to it just like you do.
My husband loves me even when I don't feel like such a great wife.
Good movie!! Good theme! Amusing animation!
Just saw your video today and wanted to comment on it per your instructions. I hope my response isn't too obscure to understand.
-animation quality (are the movements even a little realistic?)
"A Bit. A Bit." - Monty Python and the Holy Grail.
(I liked the opening-jaw movement as Jerrod hears the Newton introduce himself. ((I know he's just a "fig"ment of the imagination but may one suggest if he's going to wear a top hat, rename him Duke as in Duke Newton. (cheesy-yet-clever dual homage to the old computer game.)
-graphic quality (how well I draw characters, backgrounds, etc.) For a first time, not so bad at all. In the future, be more careful with your continuity (seems Duke Newton's body changed size when his chair shrank. His hat should have stuck out more over the top of the smaller chair.)
-story (if you could include some example of what you'd like to see out of me, that'd be great.) That's tricky. Story-telling is not the same as story-writing is not the same as story-animating. Well- you've mentioned procrastination. I'd like to see you do a "self-portrait" piece identifying the causes of your procrastination as "villains" so you can have Jerrod beat the villains. If you want some other story to animate, do something with action and romance.
-level of coherence (do you actually know what's going on?) Wasn't hard to follow.
-comedic timing - I got the jokes and actually did laugh. Don't worry about your comedic timing.
Audio suggestions- more Foley (sound effects). pay closer attention to important details like the doorbell. You gave us a close-up of a doorbell, but no sound to compliment the close-up. *ahem*...
That's all for this review.
Stay tuned next time! :)
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